aiight heres my shit

[Kareem]

check out God Feat Sheikh Spear he does the 1st verse i do the next 2, theres no hook didnt feel a need for one. Peace

oh an just in case i replied to 2 threads yesterday.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/5/kareemmusic.htm

 

[jeremy_]

nice beat, who made it?
first rapper has a pretty good flow. not really feeling his voice. good lyrics.
i find some of your words a bit hard to hear, but the flow is nice. maybe your vocals could be turned up a bit?
works without a hook, but one wouldnt hurt.
your second verse is a bit easier to hear.
pretty solid effort but could def use a hook to make it catchy.

please return the favor for my track 'Middle Child'

 

[Bigg Limn]

Not really diggin the beat...2 FruityLoopish. First dude has a solid flow, pronounciation gets a bit jumbled @ some spots. Lyrics were nice. You need a hook though, or at least something 2 fill in the gap. An audio sample or talkin or somethin. Ur vocals need 2 be turned up a little bit. Flow is solid, good delivery - feelin the emotion. Not really likin how you end the first verse though. Again, the way you end it would prolly sound better if you had a hook after it. 3rd verse is solid 2, like the first dude sometimes ur pronounciation got a lil jumbled. Decent track, got potential if you worked with it more - ie filling in the gaps.

Peace

 

[Kareem]

thanx for all your feedback, i feel ya about a hook i been thinking of one, still working on it

 

[imported_MAKaveli_10]

The beat is pretty average. I think that you could make a better one to fit this song. The first guy on the song has a good flow and okay rhymes. I dont like his voice. Your verses had some good rhymes and your flow was solid. I think it could have used a chorus. Overall a pretty good song. 7 out of 10.